The table below shows questionnaires about the opinions of club members and the general public about the new theatre in one town in 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

学员写作：

The table indicates questionnaires about the perspectives of club members and the general public about three aspects, including facilities, information and quality, of the new theatre  in a town in 2012. The comment of the these three aspects had three levels: excellent, satisfied and poor.

Overall, more proportion of club members believed the facilities and quality were excellent, while the theatre got higher information reputation from general public.

In terms of the quality of the theatre, people who prefer it to other two constituted 88% of the group club members, which is the highest proportion, followed by 72% and 54% in facilities and information respectively. By contrast, only the information was more appealing for the general public, accounting for 66%, leading the 64% in facilities and 53% in quality.

As for the other two comment levels, the quality and the information got the most satified comment from the general public with 40% and club members with 30%. By the way, merely the information got the most poor feedback.

雅思小作文完整解析（表格题：剧院问卷调查）

一、考生原来的写作思路

✅考生原始思路：

1. 开头段：改写题目，介绍表格内容 ——2012 年针对俱乐部成员和普通大众，对新剧院 3 个维度（设施、信息、质量）的调研，评价分为 excellent/satisfied/poor 三档。
2. 综述段（Overview）：概括核心趋势：俱乐部成员对设施、质量给出 “excellent” 评价比例更高；普通大众在 “信息” 这一项的好评更高。
3. 主体段 1：重点对比两组人Excellent这一档百分比，先写俱乐部成员（quality 最高 88%，其次设施 72%，信息 54%）；再写普通大众（信息 66% 最高，设施 64%，质量 53%）。
4. 主体段 2：简单描述 Satisfied 和 Poor 两类反馈的数据。

❗思路缺陷：

1. Overview 只写了 excellent，忽略两组人负面评价（poor）的对比；
2. 主体第二段逻辑混乱，没有清晰分组对比；
3. 部分表达理解错误，出现事实描述错误。

二、标出原文【正确句 & 错误句 + 改错】

原文学员范文：

1. ✅The table indicates questionnaires about the perspectives of club members and the general public about three aspects, including facilities, information and quality, of the new theatre in a town in 2012.

翻译：该表格展示 2012 年一项问卷，调查俱乐部成员与普通民众对小镇新剧院设施、信息、质量三个维度的看法。小优化：indicate → summarises（表格用 summarise 更地道）

2. ❌The comment of the these three aspects had three levels: excellent, satisfied and poor.

错误：the these重复冠词；时态不当；表达生硬。修改：Respondents’ opinions for each category were rated as excellent, satisfied or poor.翻译：受访者对每个项目的评价分为优秀、满意、较差三个等级。

3. ❌Overall, more proportion of club members believed the facilities and quality were excellent, while the theatre got higher information reputation from general public.

错误：more proportion 语法错误；higher information reputation 表达中式英语；缺少冠词 the general public。修改：Overall, a higher proportion of club members rated facilities and quality as excellent, whereas the general public gave higher excellent ratings for information.翻译：总体来看，更高比例的俱乐部成员认为设施与质量为优秀；而普通大众在信息这一项给出优秀评价的比例更高。

4. ❌In terms of the quality of the theatre, people who prefer it to other two constituted 88% of the group club members, which is the highest proportion, followed by 72% and 54% in facilities and information respectively.

错误：时态错误（过去式 preferred）；other two缺少 the；group club members语序混乱；prefer it to other two语义错误，原文不是 “更喜欢”，是选择 excellent 评价。修改：In terms of quality, 88% of club members rated it excellent, the highest figure among all categories for this group. This was followed by 72% for facilities and 54% for information.翻译：在质量方面，88% 的俱乐部成员给出优秀评价，是该群体所有项目里最高的数据；其次是设施（72%）和信息（54%）。

5. ❌By contrast, only the information was more appealing for the general public, accounting for 66%, leading the 64% in facilities and 53% in quality.

错误：leading the用词错误，不能这样表示 “高于”；more appealing 属于主观臆断，图表是评分，不是吸引力。修改：In comparison, for the general public, information received the highest excellent rating at 66%, ahead of facilities (64%) and quality (53%).翻译：与之对比，普通大众中，信息一项获得最高优秀评价（66%），高于设施（64%）和质量（53%）。

6. ❌As for the other two comment levels, the quality and the information got the most satified comment from the general public with 40% and club members with 30%.

错误：拼写 satified → satisfied；句子歧义，分不清谁 40% 谁 30%；句式混乱。修改：When it comes to 'satisfied' feedback, 40% of the general public were satisfied with quality, while 30% of club members were satisfied with information.翻译：至于 “满意” 这一档反馈，40% 普通民众对质量感到满意，30% 俱乐部成员对信息感到满意。

7. ❌By the way, merely the information got the most poor feedback.

错误：By the way口语化，学术写作禁用；merely 用词错误；缺少数据支撑。修改：Meanwhile, information had the largest share of poor feedback for both groups, at 16% of club members and 14% of the general public.翻译：与此同时，信息这一项收到的差评比例在两组人中都是最高的：俱乐部成员 16%，普通民众 14%。

三、原文优缺点点评

✅优点

1. 结构框架完整：开头 + overview + 两个主体段，符合雅思小作文结构。
2. 抓住核心对比：识别出两组受访者，三个评价维度，能区分 excellent 档数据。
3. 有基础对比词：while, by contrast，有意识做比较。
4. 没有遗漏图表核心对象：club members /general public；facilities/information/quality。

❌缺点（扣分点）

1. 语法错误多：冠词错误、时态错误、名词短语搭配错误，部分句子表意不清（CC & GR 扣分）。
2. 词汇问题：中式英语、口语词汇 by the way、单词拼写错误，用词不准确（LR 扣分）。
3. Task Achievement：overview 不够全面；主体段描述 satisfied/poor 时信息模糊，部分描述歪曲图表信息。
4. Coherence：段落内逻辑衔接弱；最后一句仓促收尾，对比不够充分。
5. 时态：数据是 2012 年，全文要用一般过去时，考生混用现在时。

📊 原范文雅思分数：5 分

评分理由：TA：5，能识别主要信息，但部分描述有误，细节对比不足；CC：5，有段落结构，但句间逻辑弱；LR：5，词汇有限，存在错误搭配；GR：5，频繁语法错误，部分句子难懂。

四、修改后 8 分范文（雅思小作文）

The table summarises the results of a 2012 survey asking club members and the general public for their opinions about three aspects of a new town theatre: facilities, information and quality. Respondents’ evaluations were classified into three levels: excellent, satisfied and poor.

Overall, a higher proportion of club members rated facilities and quality as excellent compared with the general public. By contrast, ordinary people gave a higher excellent score for information. In addition, information received the largest proportion of poor feedback from both groups.

In detail, 88% of club members thought the theatre’s quality was excellent, which was the highest percentage across all data for this group. This was followed by facilities (72%) and information (54%). For the general public, information had the highest excellent rating at 66%, slightly above facilities (64%). Quality had the lowest excellent proportion among ordinary people, at 53%.

Regarding satisfied and poor ratings, 40% of members of the public were satisfied with the theatre quality, while 30% of club members were satisfied with information. Poor feedback was generally low for all categories. Nevertheless, information had the highest negative feedback: 16% of club members and 14% of the general public rated it poor.

中文翻译：该表格汇总了 2012 年一项调查结果，询问俱乐部成员与普通民众对小镇新剧院设施、信息、质量三方面的评价。受访者的评价分为优秀、满意、较差三个等级。

总体来看，相比普通大众，更高比例的俱乐部成员认为设施与质量优秀。相反，普通民众在信息一项给出优秀评价的比例更高。此外，信息板块在两组受访者中都收到最多差评。

具体来看，88% 的俱乐部成员认为剧院质量优秀，这是该群体所有项目里最高占比，其次是设施（72%）和信息（54%）。对于普通大众，信息的优秀评价占比最高（66%），略高于设施（64%）。质量在普通民众中的优秀评价占比最低，为 53%。

在满意与较差评价方面，40% 普通民众对剧院质量感到满意，30% 俱乐部成员对信息感到满意。所有项目的差评占比整体偏低。但信息一项负面评价最多：16% 俱乐部成员和 14% 普通民众给出较差评价。

📊修改后范文评分：8 分

TA：8，概括清晰，挑选关键数据，横向对比两组人；CC：8，逻辑连贯，段落划分合理，衔接词自然；LR：8，词汇丰富准确，同义替换到位；GR：8，句式多样，时态统一，语法几乎无错。

五、雅思小作文 核心词汇、短语、高分句式

核心词汇

1. summarise v. 概括（表格首选动词）
2. respondent n. 受访者
3. proportion /percentage n. 比例
4. evaluation /rating n. 评价，评分
5. category n. 类别，项目
6. feedback n. 反馈
7. negative adj. 负面的
8. ordinary people /the general public 普通大众
9. classify v. 划分、分类

核心短语

1. be classified into 被划分为……
2. the proportion of …… 的占比
3. receive ratings of 获得…… 评价
4. by contrast /in comparison 与之相比
5. across all categories 在所有项目当中
6. the highest/lowest percentage 最高 / 最低占比
7. negative feedback 负面反馈
8. slightly above 略高于

高分句式（直接背诵）

1. The table summarises data about ……表格展示了关于…… 的数据。（开头万能句）
2. Overall, it can be seen that ……总体可以看出……（Overview 段开头）
3. A higher proportion of A did sth compared with B.相比 B，更高比例的 A 做某事。（对比百分比万能句）
4. X had the highest figure at …%, followed by …%.X 数据最高，为……%，其次是……%。
5. Regarding …, the figure for A was …至于……，A 的数据为……

六、雅思小作文写作思路（表格题通用模板思路）

1. 开头段：改写题目，简单介绍图表是什么、对象、时间，不要照抄原题。
2. Overview（综述段，最重要！拿 7 分以上必备）：挑 2 个最明显的宏观趋势，不写具体数字，只写概括。

本图 overview 两点：①俱乐部成员对 quality / 设施好评更高；大众对 information 好评更高；②information 差评在两组都是最高。

3. 主体段 1：描述最高 / 最低的一组数据（excellent 档），做两组人横向对比。
4. 主体段 2：描述剩下两个等级 satisfied & poor，补充次要对比。

小作文禁忌：不要罗列全部数字，不要主观分析原因（不要写为什么大家不满意），只描述、对比数据。