大学英语四级写作范文分析
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on how to best handle the relationship between teachers and students. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.
审题思路
此次话题师生关系贴近学生生活,因此写起来并不难。简单开篇之后,考生应该将重点放在第二段,给出处理好师生关系的一些建议。当然,这个话题还可以从不同的角度入手,比如老师应如何做,或者师生共同努力,等等。考生应结合自己的实际情况,从自己最擅长的角度写,这样容易做到言之有物。本文仅从学生角度给出了三条处理好师生关系的建议。
写作提纲
一、引出话题:从学生角度分享几条建立良好师生关系的建议(share some tips,from students' perspective)
二、具体建议
1.留下良好的第一印象(leave a good first impression)
2.努力学习,课上积极表现(study hard and be active in class)
3.课下经常与老师交流(keep contact with your teacher after class)
三、得出结论:做到学业成绩良好、课上与老师配合或者与老师成为朋友,师生关系就不会复杂(never complex)
范文点评
Teacher-student Relationship Is Never Complex
① The relationship between teachers and students has been hotly discussed in recent years in China for more and more attention has been paid to education. ②Today I would like to share some tips on how to get along well with teachers from students' perspective.
③First and foremost, leave a good first impression on your teacher. ④As the saying goes, well begun is half done. A good first impression is important for teachers to remember your name among your fellow students. ⑤Secondly, study hard and be active in class. A student who loves study can definitely impress teachers deeply. ⑥Finally, keep contact with your teacher after class so that you could make friends with each other.
⑦ To conclude, teacher-student relationship is never complex if you could have an excellent academic performance, be cooperative in class or make friends with your teacher.
精彩点评
①开门见山,描述现象:师生关系成为近几年热门话题。
②切入主题:从学生角度给出自己的建议。
③⑤⑥ 用 First and foremost、 Secondly 和Finally 具体列举建立良好师生关系的建议,层次分明。
④引用谚语,给文章增加文采。
⑦总结全文,给出结论:师生关系并不复杂。
加分亮点
attention...paid to sth.注意……(被动用法)
Well begun is half done. 良好的开端是成功的一半。
impress 使······印象深刻
academic performance 学业表现
全文翻译
师生关系并不复杂
由于人们对教育越来越关注,师生关系近几年在中国引起热议。今天,我想从学生角度分享几条关于如何与老师和睦相处的建议。
首先,给老师留下良好的第一印象。常言道:良好的开端是成功的一半。良好的第一印象对于让老师从你的众多同学中记住你非常重要。第二,努力学习,在课堂上积极表现。一个热爱学习的学生一定会让老师印象深刻。最后,课下经常与老师沟通,这样你们就会成为朋友。
总结而言,如果你学业表现良好、课上积极配合或与老师成为朋友,那么师生关系就绝对不会复杂。
