大学英语四级写作分析

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay. Suppose you have tuco options upon graduation: one is to work in a state-ouned business and the other in a joint venture. You are to make a choice between the two. Write an essay to explain the reasons for your choice. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

 

审题思路

 

这是一篇四级考试中常见的议论文。职业选择是考生未来要面对的问题,平时也会有所思考,因此写起来并不困难。无论是选择国企还是合资企业,考生都应该在第一段给出自己的选择,然后将重点放在第二段阐释自己选择的理由上,如更青眉国企的稳定或偏爱私企更为宽松活跃的氛围。

 

写作提纲

 

一、描述话题

 

毕业面临两种选择,国企还是合资企业(career choice,state-owned business,joint venture),我选择后者

 

二、分析原因

 

1.更大的个人发展空间(grow and develop)

 

2.较高的薪水(a higher salary)

 

3.多元的企业文化(diverse business culture)

 

三、重申观点

 

两者中选择合资企业(first and best choice)

 

范文

 

State-owned Business or Joint Venture

 

(1) Upon graduation, virtually all college students will confront the issue of career choice, which is truly a tough one.(2)Some hold that there is no better way to get a decent job than working in a state-owned business which will guarantee their life after retirement, while others take the attitude that a joint venture outweighs any other jobs as it may provide higher income for employees.(3)As for me, I prefer the latter one.

 

(4)For one thing, a joint venture usually offers a more cooperative and more competitive atmosphere which is suitable for the beginners to grow and develop.(5)For another, joint ventures usually offer a higher salary, which holds a tremendous fascination for a great number of people, especially for the young who need to cover the expenses of transportation,house-renting, and social activities.(6)Besides the above two,I

adore the diverse business culture in the joint ventures,immersed in which, I can broaden my vision and expand my knowledge.

 

(7)Based on the above reasons, a joint venture will be my first and best choice.

 

点评

 

(1)开门见山,描述现象:大学生毕业之际面临的两种选择。

 

(2)使用Some....while others...的表达方式说明学生出于不同原因做出的两种选择。

 

(3)使用短语As for me 表明自己的选择。

 

(4) (5)用For one thing... For another...具体列举不同的原因,层次分明。

 

(6)进一步分析做出选择的原因。

 

(7)使用Based on表明,基于上述理由做出自己的选择。

 

加分亮点

 

confront 面临

 

guarantee 保证

 

outweigh 超出

 

cover the expenses of...支付······费用immerse in...沉浸在……

 

全文翻译

 

国有企业还是合资企业

 

毕业在即,几乎所有的大学生都面临着职业选择的问题,这真称得上是一个难题。一些人认为只有在国有金业中才能课得一份体面的工作,因为国有企业可以保障他们退休后的生活。而另一些人则认为合资企业在薪水等方面的优势无疑是更好的选择。对我来说,我倾向于选择后者。

 

一方面,合资企业通常提供一个既合作又充满竞争的氛围,适合初入职场者的成长和发展。另一方面,合资企业薪水较高,对绝大部分人来说都非常有吸引力,尤其是需要支付交通、房租和社交活动费用的年轻人。除以上两点之外,我还热爱合资企业中多元的企业文化,浸染其中,可以拓宽自己的视野和知识面。

 

基于上述原因,合资企业将会是我的第一也是最好的选择。

 

主题词汇

 

job hunting 找工作

 

hire 雇用

 

income 收入

 

option 选择

 

involve 包括,涉及

 

prospect 前景

 

advantage 优点

 

perspective 视角

 

diversity 多样性

 

progress 进步

 

句式拓展

 

1. Job hunting becomes increasingly tough for graduates, for it is not only hard to...but also difficult to...【对于毕业生来说,找工作越来越难,不但……不容易,而且……也绝非易事。】

 

2. In conclusion, the joint venture is more suitable for me to work in, for I prefer..., as well as...【总之,合资企业对我来说更合适，因为我喜欢......而且......】